System dynamic help to understand the strategy of the game

AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
edited May 2013 in Working with GS (Mac)
I want to understand if the instructions are sufficient, I would like opinions and advice
http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/doctor-twist-lite/id642184454?mt=8

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  • tatiangtatiang Member, Sous Chef, PRO, Senior Sous-Chef Posts: 11,949
    I'm not sure why you posted this. Are you just giving an example of your help screen or is there something you wanted assistance with?
  • AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
    @tatiang
    I want to understand if the instructions are sufficient, I would like opinions and advice
  • tatiangtatiang Member, Sous Chef, PRO, Senior Sous-Chef Posts: 11,949
    edited May 2013
    I can tell you I don't understand it. It might be better to have several small equations such as:

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    ...along with text "Give medicine to cure bacteria" or whatever.

    Also, "DNA of the cell altered, treats with the pill" isn't really a sentence. Should it be "The pill treats altered cell DNA"? Or "Altered cell DNA is treated with a pill" or...?
  • AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
    @tatiang
    The equation is a good idea. I work now, thanks :)
  • zzap64zzap64 Member Posts: 405
    I love Doctor twist as it hurts my brain :)

    As Tatiang suggests, less text is good and focus a little more on pictorial references is a win.
    Plus, with the amount of colors seen through the opacity windows makes the text a little hard to read & take in. Double brainy hurtseese.

    Good luck my Doctor Twist creator....forward on :)
  • AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
    @zzap64 @tatiang
    your help is essential, this is my first original game, thanks.
  • tatiangtatiang Member, Sous Chef, PRO, Senior Sous-Chef Posts: 11,949
    If you need more than that screen edited, you might consider my services: https://forums.gamesalad.com/discussion/53274/proofreader-available
  • AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
    @tatiang
    thank you, I believe that your services will be very useful.
    I have to correct the spoken messages during the game.
  • AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
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  • AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
    edited May 2013
    @tatiang @zzap64 @gyroscope

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  • tatiangtatiang Member, Sous Chef, PRO, Senior Sous-Chef Posts: 11,949
    Yes! Much better. :)
  • zzap64zzap64 Member Posts: 405
    Great. Now do you actually teach the player the aim of the game? Plus the basic fundamentals of the gameplay ?
  • AxygamesAxygames Member, PRO Posts: 203
    @zzap64
    Yes, in the first level I added a tutor, watch the video.

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